Monday, 12 August 2013

SAMPLE STUDENT ESSAY

CHELSEA SNIDER

Tuesday, August 21, 2012

Florida State University College Essay


Florida State University is more than just a world-class academic institution preparing you for a future career. We are a caring community of well-rounded individuals who embrace leadership, learning, service, and global awareness. With this in mind, which of these characteristics appeal most to you, and why?”

Honestly, service didn’t become a huge part of my life until I began high school. From elementary to middle school, I was always too shy or too scared of the strangers met while volunteering to care about the impact of the work done or who it benefitted. In fact, it wasn’t until my junior year of high school, through a unique opportunity wrapped up in an odd package, that I realized the full impact of volunteer work.

We were on a family vacation to SeaWorld when my grandpa pulled me to the back of the group as we walked between rides. "Your National Honor Society does service projects outside of school, right?" I met his quizzical stare with an eyebrow raise of my own and gave a slow yes. "And as an official member, you can propose a donation, correct?" With another yes Papa gave me a smile that furthered my confusion. He had been a member of his own National Honor Society and already knew the answers to his own inquires. "Your mission, if you choose to accept it, is this. I would like you to organize a book drive to plump up the ward library. The men need somewhere to spend time and better themselves; neither of which they can accomplish with a library of twelve books.” In a vain attempt to buy some time to think, I took a sip of water before replying. Papa worked as the ward psychologist at Coffee Correctional Facility in Georgia and I had always held fanciful illusions concerning his profession. His ward was probably full of tough burly men who had plenty of time to plan the demise of the small marshmallowy girl who recommended that book they didn't care for. Mouth open and half-brained excuse at the ready, Papa stared straight down into my eyes. The look he gave me was more than just a man waiting for an answer; it was one of trust, of expectation. In that gaze I saw the confidence that Papa had in me, even if I couldn't see it in myself. So, with a heart thumping like a piston in overdrive, I presented the idea to our branch of the Society the next opportunity at school. To my surprise a chorus of 'yays' followed my tentative explanation of Papa's request and no one seemed to mind that the recipients of our donation were both out of state and incarcerated within a mental ward. With renewed spirit, the real work of the donation began. A cardboard box was placed in each of the English teachers classrooms and instructions for the collection soon followed. On one hand, I knew that my school was a tight community but I wasn't sure how enthusiastically they could fall behind a cause that was both far from home and mildly scary if misconstrued. After fourteen days of incessantly checking boxes, the final count wiped every doubt from my mind. It took two trips between my house and the school, four extra boxes, and five sweaty football players to haul all of the books safely into my garage. Weeks later when Papa came to collect all thirteen boxes, his smile brought tears to my eyes. I didn’t feel like just his granddaughter anymore, I was someone who had made a difference. Finally, with a hug and a 'job well done', two weeks of work was on its way to Georgia. Weeks later after I had nearly forgotten about the whole undertaking, a letter came. Inside of the envelope was a manila folder, cut into an even rectangle and lined with yellow construction paper. A large rose was drawn on the front of the card with the name of an author written on each petal and delicately shaded with colored pencils. Two puppies were playing underneath the rose and across the top "Thank You National Honor Society" was drawn in elegant script. Inside, each of the inmates had signed their name and those that couldn't were helped by a friend. Some of the signatures were in perfect handwriting, others were in a scrolling hand that you see on formal documents, and still others were in the shaky handwriting of someone just learning their letters. Now, at almost every family event, Papa updates me on the status and growth of the library as well as how the men treat the books like porcelain. Each of these conversations recalls the satisfaction of making my grandfather proud when he had expected so much was nothing compared to the joy brought by that letter. There is something innately gratifying in bringing a stranger joy; no matter that person's background, their past indiscretions, or their current situation.

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